First intro paragraph:
The cost of college needs to be reduced because it is not allow more less advantaged students to attend. When our nation's funds are being drained every day by a war in Iraq, it is not right that there are stil students that are unable to afford college. For those struggling to pay for college, the increased cost of living only causes more pressure.
Revised intro paragraph:
The average American is in debt. Credit card debt piles up and the cost of living keeps increasing every year. Jowever the amount of financial for low income families and minorities keeps decreasing. The importance of getting a college diapolma in order to have a more successful career are also mounting. It is important that aid to families in need be increased because it will only open college to more people.
The exercise really helped me to add more to my introduction. Once the paper is fleshed out with research then I will be able to craft my intro even more.
Thursday, November 30, 2006
Assignment 7
The cost of college tuition should be lowered
The job market for college students is too low.
The driving age needs to be raised to 18.
The drinking age should be lowered to 16.
Obesity is a problem that is affecting Americans of all
ages.
State schools should reduce class sizes
The Iraq war is being fought on false pretenses.
New Orleans needs better public transportation.
The public school system around the country needs major
improvements.
Stem cell research needs to be allowed
The cost of college tuition should be lowered
a. As the cost of living increases and the job market
tightens, the cost of college tuition keeps growing to
seemingly unreachable heights year after year.
b. Rising tuition costs affect all families with
college-aged students. However, the greatest impact is on
middle class and lower class families.
c. If costs are not lowered or more financial aid is given
out, then some families will not be able to send their
children to college. There are many people who could benefit
from a college education, but are unable to because the
money is too much of an obstacle.
d. The government and colleges financial aid organizations.
e. More financial aid is being offered every year but
college is not within the reach of every person.
f. I propose that more financial aid be offered to students
and families so that more lower income families have a
better opportunity to send their children to college.
g. It would enable even more students to benefit from a
college education.
h. Finding ways to generate more aid will be a challenge for
some schools
i. Colleges
j. It should be enacted because more funding would be
provided for students to attend college.
k. It is not that this idea is better than alternative
proposals. I see it more as a proposition to expand the
current financial aid offerings.
4.
a. Despite increased financial aid, many students do not
attend college every year because the expense is too high.
b. My proposal is to increase the current aid offerings at
colleges and universities.
c. Colleges would have to find more ways to create aid,
however, this would enable more students to attend college.
The expense would be greater on the schools, but the
benefits are worth it.
The job market for college students is too low.
The driving age needs to be raised to 18.
The drinking age should be lowered to 16.
Obesity is a problem that is affecting Americans of all
ages.
State schools should reduce class sizes
The Iraq war is being fought on false pretenses.
New Orleans needs better public transportation.
The public school system around the country needs major
improvements.
Stem cell research needs to be allowed
The cost of college tuition should be lowered
a. As the cost of living increases and the job market
tightens, the cost of college tuition keeps growing to
seemingly unreachable heights year after year.
b. Rising tuition costs affect all families with
college-aged students. However, the greatest impact is on
middle class and lower class families.
c. If costs are not lowered or more financial aid is given
out, then some families will not be able to send their
children to college. There are many people who could benefit
from a college education, but are unable to because the
money is too much of an obstacle.
d. The government and colleges financial aid organizations.
e. More financial aid is being offered every year but
college is not within the reach of every person.
f. I propose that more financial aid be offered to students
and families so that more lower income families have a
better opportunity to send their children to college.
g. It would enable even more students to benefit from a
college education.
h. Finding ways to generate more aid will be a challenge for
some schools
i. Colleges
j. It should be enacted because more funding would be
provided for students to attend college.
k. It is not that this idea is better than alternative
proposals. I see it more as a proposition to expand the
current financial aid offerings.
4.
a. Despite increased financial aid, many students do not
attend college every year because the expense is too high.
b. My proposal is to increase the current aid offerings at
colleges and universities.
c. Colleges would have to find more ways to create aid,
however, this would enable more students to attend college.
The expense would be greater on the schools, but the
benefits are worth it.
Assignment 6
1. Will lowering the drinking age increase binge drinking? I will argue to keep the drinking ge at 21 in all states. The main focus of my argument will be to show the negative impact that drinking can have on college students and teens.
2. Lowering the drinking age will increase binge drinking among teens and college students.
3. The majority of teens drink
4. They would oppose it by citing examples of teens drinking responsibly. They could also show how you get other choices at 18 (go to war, vote), so why shouldn’t you be allowed to drink?
5. I would create pathos by showing the devastating impact that binge drinking has had on some students and their families.
6. My evidence would include statistics of the negative impact of binge drinking. I would use a lot of statistics as well as the personal experiences of students and families affected by it.
2. Lowering the drinking age will increase binge drinking among teens and college students.
3. The majority of teens drink
4. They would oppose it by citing examples of teens drinking responsibly. They could also show how you get other choices at 18 (go to war, vote), so why shouldn’t you be allowed to drink?
5. I would create pathos by showing the devastating impact that binge drinking has had on some students and their families.
6. My evidence would include statistics of the negative impact of binge drinking. I would use a lot of statistics as well as the personal experiences of students and families affected by it.
Assignment 5
Logos paragraph revision:
Original paragraph:
However, one must also look at the fact that Clear
Channel’s similar playlists help to promote certain
artists. The repeated plays of a song, regardless of
quality, can make it popular. It is important to note that
some artists might not have become popular without the
promotional push from repeated spins on Clear Channel.
Revised paragraph with more logos:
However, one must also look at the fact that Clear
Channel’s similar playlists help to promote certain
artists. The repeated plays of a song, regardless of
quality, can make it popular. This gives some new artists a
chance to be heard. However, by a lot of the same songs, the
station is greatly decreasing the opportunities for local
and unsigned artists to get played. The stations could
choose to give an unsigned artist’s song a lot of spins,
but the overbearing control of Clear Channel prevents this
from happening very much. It is important to note that some
artists might not have become popular without the
promotional push from repeated spins on Clear Channel.
Original paragraph:
However, one must also look at the fact that Clear
Channel’s similar playlists help to promote certain
artists. The repeated plays of a song, regardless of
quality, can make it popular. It is important to note that
some artists might not have become popular without the
promotional push from repeated spins on Clear Channel.
Revised paragraph with more logos:
However, one must also look at the fact that Clear
Channel’s similar playlists help to promote certain
artists. The repeated plays of a song, regardless of
quality, can make it popular. This gives some new artists a
chance to be heard. However, by a lot of the same songs, the
station is greatly decreasing the opportunities for local
and unsigned artists to get played. The stations could
choose to give an unsigned artist’s song a lot of spins,
but the overbearing control of Clear Channel prevents this
from happening very much. It is important to note that some
artists might not have become popular without the
promotional push from repeated spins on Clear Channel.
Assignment 4
Pathos Paragraph Revision.
Original paragraph:
In today’s musical climate of corporate control, the
question must be raised about some companies’ amount of
control. Has the conglomerate Clear Channel helped to shape
the sound of today’s pop music. As airtime on the radio
shrinks, the ability to create a good song under four
minutes is becoming a greater skill than ever. With the
number of new genres that are constantly becoming popular,
pop music is becoming harder to define. With so many tracks
battling for prime position, producers and artists need to
make songs that stand out. The real art in today’s pop
music is production. The first major aspect of creating a
great pop song is keeping your song short and getting your
ideas across quickly. The fact is, you don’t hear many
six-minute songs on the radio today. By creating a lack of a
wide range of songs, Clear Channel plays a large role in
defining what music is currently popular.
Revised paragraph with extra pathos:
In today’s musical climate of corporate control, the
question must be raised about some companies’ amount of
control. Clear Channel has helped to forever ruin the
structure of the pop song. Be forcing songs to be shorter
and shorter, it can become harder more creative ideas to
become popular. As airtime on the radio shrinks, the ability
to create a good song under four minutes is becoming a
greater skill than ever. With the number of new genres that
are constantly becoming popular, pop music is harder to
define than ever. With so many tracks battling for prime
position, producers and artists need to make songs that
stand out. Due to companies like Clear Channel, the art of
the pop song has switched from quality songwriting to
production. Producers nowadays have to know how to
communicate the ideas in their songs quickly. Time
constraints on songs have also made the listener not be able
to appreciate longer pieces of music. Often times when I
play a longer piece of music (regardless of genre) for a
friend, the main thing they say is “How long is it?” or
“Is it over yet?” Our ears have become so accustomed to
short, snappy pieces of music. It is now a challenge for
many people to even listen to a song over six minutes in
length. The fact is, you don’t hear many six-minute songs
on the radio today. By creating a lack of a wide range of
songs, Clear Channel plays a large role in defining what
music is currently popular.
Original paragraph:
In today’s musical climate of corporate control, the
question must be raised about some companies’ amount of
control. Has the conglomerate Clear Channel helped to shape
the sound of today’s pop music. As airtime on the radio
shrinks, the ability to create a good song under four
minutes is becoming a greater skill than ever. With the
number of new genres that are constantly becoming popular,
pop music is becoming harder to define. With so many tracks
battling for prime position, producers and artists need to
make songs that stand out. The real art in today’s pop
music is production. The first major aspect of creating a
great pop song is keeping your song short and getting your
ideas across quickly. The fact is, you don’t hear many
six-minute songs on the radio today. By creating a lack of a
wide range of songs, Clear Channel plays a large role in
defining what music is currently popular.
Revised paragraph with extra pathos:
In today’s musical climate of corporate control, the
question must be raised about some companies’ amount of
control. Clear Channel has helped to forever ruin the
structure of the pop song. Be forcing songs to be shorter
and shorter, it can become harder more creative ideas to
become popular. As airtime on the radio shrinks, the ability
to create a good song under four minutes is becoming a
greater skill than ever. With the number of new genres that
are constantly becoming popular, pop music is harder to
define than ever. With so many tracks battling for prime
position, producers and artists need to make songs that
stand out. Due to companies like Clear Channel, the art of
the pop song has switched from quality songwriting to
production. Producers nowadays have to know how to
communicate the ideas in their songs quickly. Time
constraints on songs have also made the listener not be able
to appreciate longer pieces of music. Often times when I
play a longer piece of music (regardless of genre) for a
friend, the main thing they say is “How long is it?” or
“Is it over yet?” Our ears have become so accustomed to
short, snappy pieces of music. It is now a challenge for
many people to even listen to a song over six minutes in
length. The fact is, you don’t hear many six-minute songs
on the radio today. By creating a lack of a wide range of
songs, Clear Channel plays a large role in defining what
music is currently popular.
Assignment 3
Response to #3 on Page 131.
One time family friends of mine and myself got into a debate
about evolution in schools. This debate occurred sitting
around my mom’s best friend’s dining room table after
dinner one night. The participants were myself, my mom, my
mom’s best friend and my mom’s best friend’s mother.
The position taken by my mom’s friend was that it should
not be taught in schools. She said that it was offensive to
teach children about evolutionary theories that they are
taught not to believe in by the church. She stated that each
child is a product of how they are raised and that their
ideals tend to come from their parents. She stated this as a
way of explaining her own outlook (She was raised as a
Christian Scientist). My mom’s friend’s stance on
evolution would place her on as a conservative. She was not
able to be persuaded in any other direction, because her
beliefs were so ingrained in her.
One time family friends of mine and myself got into a debate
about evolution in schools. This debate occurred sitting
around my mom’s best friend’s dining room table after
dinner one night. The participants were myself, my mom, my
mom’s best friend and my mom’s best friend’s mother.
The position taken by my mom’s friend was that it should
not be taught in schools. She said that it was offensive to
teach children about evolutionary theories that they are
taught not to believe in by the church. She stated that each
child is a product of how they are raised and that their
ideals tend to come from their parents. She stated this as a
way of explaining her own outlook (She was raised as a
Christian Scientist). My mom’s friend’s stance on
evolution would place her on as a conservative. She was not
able to be persuaded in any other direction, because her
beliefs were so ingrained in her.
Assignment 2
1. Is minimalism a valid art form?
2. Is there a line between performance art and obsenity?
3. Is pop music art?
Is pop Music Art?
As air time on the radio shrinks, the ability to create a good song under four minutes is becoming a greater skill than ever. With the number of new genres that are constantly becoming popular, pop music is becoming harder to define. With so many tracks battling for prime position, producers and artists need to make songs that stand out. The real art in today’s pop music is production The first major aspect of creating a great pop song is keeping your song short and getting your ideas across quickly. The fact is, you don’t hear many six-minute songs on the radio today. There is a major art to crafting a pop song.
Many of the hit records in today’s music scene use a verse-chorus-verse structure. Producers such as John Shanks, Michelle branch and Timbaland create songs with their own unique style. Producers often help to shape the sound of artists today, than the artists themselves.
2. Is there a line between performance art and obsenity?
3. Is pop music art?
Is pop Music Art?
As air time on the radio shrinks, the ability to create a good song under four minutes is becoming a greater skill than ever. With the number of new genres that are constantly becoming popular, pop music is becoming harder to define. With so many tracks battling for prime position, producers and artists need to make songs that stand out. The real art in today’s pop music is production The first major aspect of creating a great pop song is keeping your song short and getting your ideas across quickly. The fact is, you don’t hear many six-minute songs on the radio today. There is a major art to crafting a pop song.
Many of the hit records in today’s music scene use a verse-chorus-verse structure. Producers such as John Shanks, Michelle branch and Timbaland create songs with their own unique style. Producers often help to shape the sound of artists today, than the artists themselves.
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